An insight into my very first book - Stolen Memories

Nervously I have posted the beginning of my book for your to view, critique or commend, all of which are very welcome.

I say nervously as I am sure there are many of you who have doubts about whether you possess the skill or the ability to write, I know I do.

My book is more than half way through and I thought it was time to gauge some feedback.

http://melsinclair.blogspot.com/p/stolen-memories.html

I look forward to reading your comments (hopefully)!